[thelist] trash my new site pls

[Joseph A Borg]

thanks for the criticism...

On Wednesday, April 10, 2002, at 04:01 PM, Miriam Frost wrote:

> Hi, Joe!
>
> Nice start, and I hope this doesn't sound like I'm harshing out on you.
> Most
> of my questions were/are regarding copy, I think that's where you really
> could improve things --
>
> Why do you need to "confess" that you're a dreamer? Why not just say
> it? Or
> if you're looking for work with this site, is that what you really want
> to
> convey? I mean, to a lot of potential employers, that might sound like
> they're going to get someone they need to prod a lot...
that's the way I am, if somebody has problems dealing with it, it's up
to them.
I love 'spreading' my knowledge more than 'focusing'
> D.T.P.? Desktop publishing? That's a pretty unusual acryonym - what if
> you
> just spell it out?
good point, sounds too much like hey I know the word and you don't!
> What does "Trespassers to be enlightened" mean? Oh. Got it. Not shot.
> Enlightened about what?
If you came over to little Malta 17x27km most public spaces have this
keep out notices set up by hunters on public land... then everybody
wants to build up walls real, virtual, social...
> Typography section -- from my experience, when I see a link named this
> on a
> designer's site, I think I'm going to see fonts that they've designed.
> What
> is your goal with this section? Who is Charles Bigelow? (Yes, I know,
> but do
> your potential clients? Why should they care?)
good point. I intend to put stuff where I use type. Though I have added
some maltese characters to fonts I use frequently (Univers, Frutiger,
Bembo, Officina, Isadora...) I still don't have that great idea to
produce a diplay font (reading fonts require loads of experience, me
thinks)
> "The evolving art of messing with photos" --  err. What?
ops this is also a personal site so can i have some expressive license
> There's a typo at the bottom of the page - "especialy" shb.
> "especially."
> I've really liked your photography throughout, but you might take
> another
> look at a lot of the copy. It might be a little punchier, and more
> effective
> if it flows logically form one paragraph to the next.
yeah, this one has go through the sieve. I tend to think too many ideas
at once and end up with a mess, usually I spot most inconsistencies
after second third read...
> The red background on your illustration in the bottom right corner does
> not
> match the red of the page. On the about you page (I like the way the
> illustration is in color now!), the backrounds on all the links are
> grey,
> you might want to think about consistency here.
well, I thought that since I did all the pages and the content and want
to work in all these fields and... I selected them all ;-)
> Err... say someone wants to hire you -- how do they get in touch?
> Maybe I
> missed it but I'm not seeing any contact information...
usually I point people to this page, I would like to have a good
criticism first (thank you), finish my assignments (just did) and do my
finals (early May-shudder). Then I plan to have a really good mail shot
for local business (shhh... don't tell the competition though;-)

> Hope that was helpful, and good luck!
that was and thanks
> best regards,
> Miriam