[thechat] Essay help, anyone?

[Warden, Matt]

Anyone have a few spare minutes to rip an essay i wrote apart? it's for a
full-ride scholarship to a selective school and the essay has to be my
strong point.

All info (including the essay) is here:
http://members.evolt.org/mwarden/essays/muohio.htm

Any help would be appreciated. Even if its just "damn, matt, that essay
sucks".

And, of course, if I get the scholarship. I'll have extra money to 
buy a nice gift for everyone who helped with the essay.


No, really, I'm serious.

Essay's due Oct 1 (Monday).

Thanks all, 

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mattwarden
mattwarden.com